dead escalator / khood kar zeena

wrote two versions of Khood-kar Zeena...(both still in draft stage)...let me know your input...and when i sat down to do the english version i could not go beyond three lines...think am being lazy:)...

dead escalator
laden
caught on a dead escalator
my thoughts wandered
...................off
to distant lands
millions where
toil day and night
..................hopelessly


Khood-kar Zeena ver 01
is khood-kar zeenay per aye meray khudaya
laooN kahaaN say darmian e hujoom
istada rehnay ki pairON maiN woh sak'at?

ik rOz barqi rau youN bachaa kay jaan
bhaagi taarON kay jaal e gunjaaN say
kay is shehar kay sub khood-kar zeenay
chaltay qadmOn kO taktay reh ga’aye

oos baybus zeenay per bojh-lada chala jO
tO aaya yeh khayal kay awaam watan maiN
natawaaN kaandhON per apnay
un gin't na'khudaON ka bojh sadiON say
bardasht ker rahay haiN baghair kisi oof kay

main youN pa ba jOlaan
oos khood-kar zeenay per
shikast aashna hu'a

Khood-kar Zeena ver 02
is khood-kar zeenay per
laooN kahaaN say
istada rehnay ki
pairON main woh sak'at?

ik rOz barqi rau youN
ghayab hui sheh'r say
kay sub khood kar zeenay
qad’m taktay reh ga’aye

oos bay'bus zeenay per
bojh-lada chala jO
tO aaya yeh khayal
kay awaam watan maiN
natawaaN kaandhON per
sadiON say un gin’t
nakhudaON ka bojh
baghair kisi oof kay
bardasht ker rahay haiN

maiN youN pa ba jOlaan
oos khood-kar zeenay per
shikast aashna hu’a